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Ijustloveher
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by Ijustloveher » Thu Mar 16, 2023 5:15 am
Guhunkadorn wrote: ↑Fri Mar 10, 2023 4:51 am
So yeah, I'm ready for the next chapter(s)... Very hot...and well written.
Noted.
What would you like me to elaborate on in particular? What kind of event, interaction, experience? It helps me to know.
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Guhunkadorn
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by Guhunkadorn » Mon Mar 20, 2023 4:01 pm
Your narrative is very concisely written making the progression of your denial seem very real and inevitable. What was the event, or moment of realization that you knew the point of no return was reached, that you'd lost Marian sexually and I suppose emotionally.
Did you ever try to reverse course and reinstate your position as the main man in Marion's life?
Maybe what I like to read is simply the continuation of the story as it builds to the end point.
How was the ownership of the home resolved after the break up?
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robzig
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by robzig » Wed Apr 05, 2023 11:09 pm
Fantastic writing.Many thanks.