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[Prufrock]

All, I mentioned in the cuckold forum that I am working on a fiction story as a way to flesh out my own fetish fantasy while real life progress is slow. I’ve set up the story in a “Him” / “Her” format, with chapters alternating between the two main characters. The first few chapters are based strongly on our more recent personal experience, with the story departing where it moves beyond our personal storyline.

I’m hoping some of you can help with some questions I have due to my inexperience.

Some of the stories I’ve read online get into the action very quickly and were note that fulfilling to me. I’m sure they appeal to plenty of people, but given that our story (and, from what I have read) the story for a lot of couples is gradual, I’m having my story ease into a first encounter, as the wife in the story is sexually reserved and slowly discovers her own desire for this lifestyle. By “slow”, of course, I don’t mean I plan on dragging this out for 500 pages. I’ve seen a similar trend in XXX movies, where there is a new market of “romance” movies that go lighter on the action and include more storyline. While this approach is ideal for me (as a writer and reader), do any of you think it would have an appeal beyond my personal gratification? Only to women?

Sissification and submission to a bull are not part of my fantasies at this time. Are these components common/expected in cuck fiction?

To try to understand my own fetish, I’ve done a lot of reading that includes psychological motivations for why one might be into this lifestyle. Would including such things as minor anecdotal characterization be a distraction to a story line? Would they be off-putting for some of you if you picked up such a story?

Thanks for your thoughts? I’m enjoying the creative process, but want to keep myself on track.

[NSEW1]

I think a good number of sincere readers would find your story very exciting. What you describe sounds very erotic.

Do what appeals to you. Be true to yourself and don’t worry about the labels and constraints of what other people consider acceptable or what others expect is in or out.

[Prufrock]

NSEW1, thanks for your feedback and affirmation. No worries, I'm staying true to me, but as a freelance writer, I can't completely shake the part of me that keeps the audience in mind. I'd be broke otherwise!

[NSEW1]

In that vein, I would suggest you establish the true motivations for each character - the wife and the husband. What do they desire and what gets them off? What interaction do they desire from the bull? What makes the bull interested? Does the husband want to see his wife fulfilled - is that his primary motivation? Or does he have a deeper need to submit? Does he desire to submit to his wife only ? Or also to her lover?

[OOAA]

Dear Prufrock,

I like your approach. For me "quick" stories are hard to believe..., it sounds much more realistic if the have a slow step by step way of developing moments, feelings, changes,....

It would be nice to know how you would describe in detail your fetish..., you mention no sissyfication and not bull submission, which is perfectly ok not to be included in a cuckold story...

... and what about light humilliation from wife to husband? what about comparison husband-lover done by wife? what about the wife telling the husband what is happening inside her (mind, heart and sex)? what about sharing in detail with him the most intimate moments she is enjoying sooo much with her lover? would the greatness sex experiences she is having with her lover, affects the sex encounters with husband? In number, type or quality...? .....

Best wishes for your new story!
Oscar