The sexual awakening

[couple20uk]

Hi Bankshot1993,

I wanted to give you some personal feedback after reading your unfinished story "The Sexual Awaking" yesterday which I do hope you find time to finish in the near future. Remember the views below are just my own and they might be wrong.

The story arc is a good one. I do remember reading something similar many years ago where the couple place folded pieces of paper with sexual tasks in a goldfish bowel and drew then drew them out on date night. It a good primase for a story.

I did like your story characters, though personally I would of liked to see a extra few low risks tasks building the story and our love for the Doug and Jana characters before the pretend rape scene as I thought it jumped a little to much to something quite extreme but hey that just me....

I did think from chapter 9, "A New Direction" the storyline really does take 90 degree turn when getting into BDSM. Something I felt comes too quickly for the reader or at least for me I was expecting at least more dialogue and discussion with our main characters Doug and Jana before they go down this path. Are they just observing this for now?

The visit to the club is interesting though I was not too sure where the story was going at this point. I have no issue with going down the BDSM route though and I am another who cannot see how Courtney spends the whole time talking behind the curtain. Surely (if we believe the plotline) she only interested atm to win her husband back and she needs to know his thoughts/feelings before she joins in with anything at the club.

Good writing and I am another who is looking forward to see where this goes. I hope you have the time and will power to continue.

Thank you for posting.

[Open2it]

Love the story so far and can’t wait to see how the characters develop.